I'm digging this. The opening line about 'secrets' hooked me instantly. Nice copy points and production.
Only part that feels off is when he calls out the person in the RV "living here illegally." That just feels like your picking on someone *lucky* enough to be living in a van... down by the river...
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I'm digging this. The opening line about 'secrets' hooked me instantly. Nice copy points and production.
Only part that feels off is when he calls out the person in the RV "living here illegally." That just feels like your picking on someone *lucky* enough to be living in a van... down by the river...
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